Comic 37 - Fingers
23rd Mar 2014, 7:49 PM in First Friday
Fingers
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view
I have to decide whether to have a few more pages of them chatting, or just move straight to the next chapter in a cut.

I'm thinking the cut would be better.
User comments:
Jst56strong edit delete reply
Jst56strong
The pacing has been slow so far so i say you add a few more pages.

I like the change of pace by the way view. As much as I loved your action scene, your characters are why I keep reading your work. This slow to moderate pace you've been taking so far is letting us get to see their little romance/ friendship in different way than that of your previous works. Not judging them but the relationships in space pulp seem to burst to life in only a few pages and in never mind the gap, the relationships all seem to be preset in a way that these aren't. The crew of NMTG had ties connecting them before the story even started and these characters just met.

lol well enough rambling on my end. GREAT comic so far view.
view edit delete reply
view
Yeah, this is a comic about people who all like the same thing, while the earlier comics were about people who were all in the same place.
Jst56strong edit delete reply
Jst56strong
Well everyone in cheer all seemed to like the same thing :P
Phuji edit delete reply
Phuji
Jst, If I could "Like" your post, I would.
Jst56strong edit delete reply
Jst56strong
Thanks friend :)
Kain Yusanagi edit delete reply
Kain Yusanagi
Personally I like the slower pace. Reminds me more of NMtG's pacing, and there I really fell in love with the characters- Honestly made me cry. Please don't rush Scrub Diving, and tkae it slow. :)
Sheela edit delete reply
Sheela
A few more pages of this won't hurt the comic, methinks.
Offcourse, I son't know what the author intends to do with the comic.

But even so, I think it will be hard for you to "break" the story in this one, since as a character driven story you could only really break it if you ended up with vapid characters noone cares about.

Give them depth, give them feelings, give them believable interaction and we will read it and go "oooh" and "aahh" at the appropiate time. :)
cattservant edit delete reply
cattservant
How can she resist
Such a soft advance...

[One or two more pages of this please.
At least display the young ladies reacting
to each other in their new suits.]
view edit delete reply
view
Hmmmm...
cattservant edit delete reply
cattservant
You've got this story in a very nice steady balance/spin right now.
Slower and it might wobble,
Faster and it might veer off
At an unexpected angle on you.
Bellar edit delete reply
Bellar
Does anyone else look for coded messages in cattservant's posts? Something about metered speech has me checking every time.
Brex edit delete reply
Same here. Cattservant just seems the most, poetic, I want to say, posts. Or are they haiku's?
cattservant edit delete reply
cattservant
Just do not give me
a parking ticket!
Dragonrider edit delete reply
Dragonrider
You Sir are a Dirty Old Man.
Sheela edit delete reply
Sheela
Well .. he *is* a cat.

On a sidenote :
Allis sure is hitting closer to home in Panel 4, it looked like Fusion almost got it this time.
cattservant edit delete reply
cattservant
She certainly felt the thrust...

[Meow!]
>^OO^<!
Sheela edit delete reply
Sheela
Bad Cat !
NAUGHTY CAT !

:D
cattservant edit delete reply
cattservant
I bathe on a reasonable schedule,
The Cats demand it!
Sheela edit delete reply
Sheela
I didn't say dirty cat !
Danger wasp edit delete reply
Danger wasp
I like the pacing. builds character, but I feel like its Hong to drag on
Brex edit delete reply
I like character driven stories. Yes it can be slow, but only if the character's aren't properly expressed.

Here is a good example of pacing and character build-up. Fusion despite having a great physique is still self-conscious.

Alis seems to be more accepting of her appearance and even gives Fusion back the same advice she gave her.
view edit delete reply
view
Well, I try.
Brex edit delete reply
Well then View, keep trying because you have me hooked, as usual.
Kain Yusanagi edit delete reply
Kain Yusanagi
Well said, Brex!
cattservant edit delete reply
cattservant
BTW: "DR MOM"?
[She very well could be,
given the hints so far.]
wiseguy edit delete reply
wiseguy
I really enjoyed the last panel, because it definitely makes you think.
Jst56strong edit delete reply
Jst56strong
So you think her mom is supplying the patches?
cattservant edit delete reply
cattservant
Well in Alis's case they are most likely medical necessities.
Kain Yusanagi edit delete reply
Kain Yusanagi
Makes sense, and I'm leaning towards Alis being a tester for prototype equipment that is being developed to help people with whatever issue she has.
elfolampo edit delete reply
elfolampo
O was amazed no one had commented on that for.

DR. MOM, she's a doctor.

Anyway, she asked about permission to have the money for the diving lessons, so it's probably her actual mom.
Sheela edit delete reply
Sheela
Unless it is the good Dr. Who, whom went on a gender bender to cover up for a fender bender !


... crazier things have happened, like .. Daleks walking on stairs.
Ethereal (Guest) edit delete reply
Her right ear in the last panel is really sticking out. Is it mobile?
Haps edit delete reply
The slow pace and anticipation is killing me..
please dont speed up!
seriously i get this ache in my chest every time i read a page wanting the next one.
view edit delete reply
view
That's the best compliment!
apocrypha edit delete reply
I like the close-up detail in Fusion's hair.